Lumin-Mood Corner LED Lamp
From a copywriting perspective I wrote the description/ad specifically to target the customer “pain point,” which is the desire to control the mood of a room. I don’t know who your target audience is yet, so I didn’t hold back in terms of vocabulary and adjectives. If you’re interested in a rewrite I would be happy to do a second take and simplify the language. I wasn't sure if you wanted us to change the product title either--but if so my idea is to include elegant terms like "ambiance" or "edge." Maybe "Lumin-Mood Edge Ambiance LED lamp."
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Contest Holder - 3 years ago
Thanks again!
- 3 years ago
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Contest Holder - 3 years ago
You are the first person to notice I wanted a title as well. So that deserves extra points you can take COLOR LED STANDING out I wont be including that as the title.
- 3 years ago
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Contest Holder - 3 years ago
I love the creativity and the flow! The only thing i would want ios a better opening fort the add. I doo like the play on words you have with romatic red birthday blue etc. In the first paragraph as well you did use radiant twice but that can be easily modified.
- 3 years ago
